Tuesday, April 20, 2010

Teaser Tuesday!

This is my first teaser, so I'm a bit nervous.

My teaser is a snippet from my WIP (511 words). It's YA fantasy/Greek Mythology/Paranormal romance. :D
It's the POV of my MC Rhea. Hope this isn't too confusing.



*snipped*

16 comments:

Annie McElfresh said...

Love the intern emotional struggle here. It's well written, and flowed nicely! Great snip! :D

PS WELCOME to Tuesday Teasers!! :D

Aubrie said...

Gorgeous writing! Wow, I'm impressed.

The pacing is intense and kept me reading!

Instead of "seemed to shoot" I would just put "Shot through me"

:)

I hope you post more because I want to know what happened!

La-La-La-Laurie said...

I really love their interaction. Her internal dialogue is perfect and interesting.

Cynthia Watson said...

Beautiful!

Karla Nellenbach said...

the internal dialogue here is great...very real and believable.

sagelikethespice said...

Beautiful description in this teaser

Talli Roland said...

Nice, Suzanne! I love the flow and the feeling that we're right inside her head. Very believable.

Jill Wheeler said...

Nice job amping up the conflict!

Marilyn Almodovar said...

Loved the descriptions and the whole of the emotions. This line made me smile: Or maybe the changes just hadn't caught up with me yet.

Don't we all feel like that sometimes?

CJ Paris said...

Overwhelming, overpowering. Nice.

I'm not the biggest romance fan, but by the end... well damn. ;)

Sarah Olutola said...

A lot of emotion here, powerful emotion. Deep, sensual and frustrating. Awesome :D

Glen Akin said...

Nice. This is good. A little too romance for me, but still great

Remilda Graystone said...

I liked it! Your writing was very dreamy. (I don't know if that made sense.) I thought you said "eyes" a lot, but I still got into the scene. Thanatos, cool name! And a daemon of death? REALLY cool!

Welcome to Teaser Tuesday, by the way! Hope to see more from you. :)

Ee Leen Lee said...

the protagonist is intriguing but I'm concerned that there is a bit too much internal thought as opposed to external action? More action and movement will pull your reader deeper into the story

Paul C said...

Riveting.

The Blogger Girlz said...

I felt like shaking her by the shoulders and saying, "God Damn it, just KISS him already!" I loved this teaser, it was descriptive and sexy and I really loved how you sucked me in with anticipating, like, will they kiss or will they not? Great job, I was hanging on the edge of my seat! :D

~Ella